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Section Introduction

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Section Introduction

Postby McMurphy » Thu Mar 04, 2010 5:53 pm

Welcome to the GS Creative Corner of the Gunslinger forums!

Before we go any further, let's thank alphaagent23 for coming up with the idea. :D

This section is to be used to post members' creative writing, whether it be finished or unfinished short stories and poems, graphic arts, music, and any other expressions of self made art! Please only post your own work here, and not the creative enterprises of friends or published pieces by third parties. Also, let us all know if you are posting your work to simply share it with the rest of us or if you are looking for critiques. For the people critiquing a work by request of the author, please be critical and constructive, but always respectful.

When posting a topic of your talent, be sure to include one of our new topic icons so folks know if you are sharing artwork, writing, or music.

I once read a good collection of short stories by Neil Gaiman entitled Smoke and Mirrors. Within the preface of the book, he hid an extra short story. He noted that he took the idea from another author, so I would like to steal Mr. Gaiman's borrowed idea here in this introduction to our new creative writing section.

Often, there is an assumption that Gunslinger Gaming got its name out of admiration of Stephen King's Dark Tower series. While I do enjoy the series (however uneven in narrative it may be), that is not our namesake. Rather, the origin of the gunslinger as the motif...as the mascot...of our gaming community is in a protest poem I wrote back in 2000 as part of a collection of short works with related themes and motifs I was writing called American Noose. Below, is the poem that I was most pleased with the results. It was written while watching the crackdown on WTO protesters being piped live into my living room. Inspired by Bob Dylan's "It's Alright, Ma (I'm Only Bleeding)" and John Thelwall's The Peripatetic, the following poem helped keep the gunslinger in the forefront of many of my hobbies.


I've Come to Bury Your God

by Lee McMurphy

A nameless nomad arrived in town around noon.
He wore a duster designed without mirth,
Boots built to besiege dark drifting,
Hat that hung shade across his sight,
And a long barreled shovel slung
Across his back that he took to trough earth.
As he dug, he mouthed, “I’ve come to bury your god.”

Preacher with pressed slacks came to pick at the drifter.
On the whole, the holy man had skin drawn
To successfully stretch over his feeble frame.
“The spider seems to have your spirit, son,”
The preacher said with perfect pronouncement of shame.
“You are tomorrow, and I will not take
Tomorrow tainting the town of Yesterday’s blame.”
The drifter merely took from his duster
A glossy paged Bible and tossed it for earth’s claim,
Whispering, “I’ve come to bury your god.”

Businessman with a tie tried to buy the drifter.
For a sale, the salesman would always draft
His hair into a sand shaded, slippery knoll.
“I’d like to market your manner, my man,”
The businessman told with a melody like toll.
“Your mug could be on a lunch box---low price---
As long as your stock stays hot on Wallstreet like coal.”
The drifter merely took from his duster
Golden coins carved by kids and sent them in the hole,
Muttering, “I’ve come to bury your god.”

Politician with pride stood aside the drifter.
As a law, the lawman would always drag
His loose hair across his head like a nervous itch.
“Plant your rinds of revolt elsewhere, you fool,”
The politician complained with a pious pitch.
“Your voice is not the current currency
Since my civic duty is of a corporate niche.”
The drifter merely took from his duster
Campaign pins for logos and plucked them in the ditch,
Uttering, “I’ve come to bury your god.”

Reporter with spiked high heels hounded the drifter.
For the news, the newscaster always dressed
To bring some flash to a dull lead she might follow.
“Stand by your shovel and look sad, my star,”
The reporter requested in hope he’d wallow.
"Don’t speak and be cursed as Apollyon, but
Pose for me, and I can cast you as Apollo.”
The drifter merely took from his duster
Narrow lensed cameras and flung them in earth’s hollow,
Explaining, “I’ve come to bury your god.”

Army man with stripes sought to suppress the drifter.
Generally, the general had metals draped
From his passionless apparel like a proud slave.
“Move, or I’ll be forced to remove you, foe!”
The army man barked to badly mimic the brave.
“Do what I command for you are nothing,
And I take commands only from my sharpened stave!”
The drifter merely took from his duster
A bloodied flag without stars and gave it a grave,
Declaring, “I’ve come to bury your god.”

The gunslinger galloped out of town at midnight.
He wore a duster designed by the dire,
Boots born for destructive drifting,
Hat that hid the moon from his sight,
And a shovel slung on his back
When he traveled with a tall trail of fire.
As he rode, he warned, “I’ve come to bury your god.”
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Re: Section Introduction

Postby alphaagent23 » Thu Mar 04, 2010 7:36 pm

Beautiful usage of assonance, consonance, alliteration and repitition. The drifter is seen taking worldly conterparts for god and dismisses them, possibly understanding the errors in idolatry. Also the men that come along are described negatively which adds to my formentioned point in that those men were not what they thought themselves to be(have faults). The turn somewhat confuses me though I intrepreted the gunslinger going to burry the drifters pride, for the drifter himself seems to hold himself to a higher standard and doing so holds on to the idol of pride. Thats what I got but beautiful poem Murph and I will add one soon.
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Re: Section Introduction

Postby geo » Fri Mar 05, 2010 12:56 pm

that was a great poem Murph,i really enjoyed reading it!,,And thank you Alpha for this awesome idea ! i cant wait to read some other gunslingers' work!!
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